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Thu, 21 May 1998 13:04:25 -0700
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<01BD84AF.8BF563A0@chfinley> from "Charles H. Finley" at May 21, 98 11:56:52 am
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I'd suggest changing:
>
> Analyze this!
>
>            My favorite server OS
>            Is not UNIX
>            Is not NT
>            It is open, reliable, scalable,
>            secure, supported, and above all,
>            available NOW,
>            It's called MPE
>
> "MPE, 25 years of PROVEN performance
>        and ready for the next millenium".

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   Analyze this!

      My favorite server OS...
         Is not UNIX
         Is not NT
         Is open, reliable, scalable,
            secure, supported, and above all,
            available NOW,
      It's called MPE

   MPE, 25 years of PROVEN performance
   and ready for the next millenium!


Note the spacing changes, and minor tweak to "It is open".

I'd suggest dropping ", and above all," for several reasons:

   - clutters the text
   - ironic, since it's visually *below* all, not "above"

and changing all of the "Is" into "is".
and changing "MPE, 25" to "MPE :" or "MPE ...".

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