Tim, Nice effort! Unfortunately, it looks like the customers are doing HP's job of advertising the product and I don't think that's the idea you want to convey. Just MHO, of course. Tim Ericson wrote: > > Okay, another POV, maybe a little on the "devil's advocate" side... > > RE: Ken's BETA version of the ad: > > > http://www.editcorp.com/wsj/kens-ad-1.html > > I like the text, but I think we're getting a little away from the > 'keep it simple' idea. Someone(s?) had suggested that the ad be > kept *very* short, and the URL given therein would contain all > the 'meat' we wish to present. > > To that end, take a look at this month's (August 2000) "HP World" > news magazine, on page 11. VERY simple ad: medium-sized logo > near the top of the page; "Godlike performance" quote from > InfoWorld about 1/3 down *in a big font*; an invite to see them > at HP World 2000, with the booth # at the bottom 1/3 (a good > place for a URL, as well); and the company name/URL at the bottom > of the page. VERY effective! > > My take? "Hey Carly!" at the top; "HPe3000!" in a BIG font 1/4 > down, with "(we'd like to let the world know about HP's best, > least-known OS!)" immediately below in a much smaller font (or > something similar) ; "XXX Fortune 500 companies know the secret, > do you?" 1/2 way down; 'http://www.e3000.org" at the bottom 1/4; > "Paid for by XXXX HPe3000 customers worldwide." at the very > bottom. > > FWIW! > > P.S. "The check's in the mail..." > > +-------------------------------------------------------------------+ > My mind is my own, as are my ideas and opinions. > My heart, body, and soul, however, all belong to others. Tim. > +-------------------------------------------------------------------+ > Tim Ericson tericson DenKor Dental Management Corp. > Sr. Systems Analyst at denkor 503-526-4440 (my direct number) > (& Systems Manager) dot com http://www.denkor.com > Programming HPe3000s since 1983! Quality dental care since 1970! > +-------------------------------------------------------------------+ > UDCs and Command Files: http://www.denkor.com/hp3000/command_files > +-------------------------------------------------------------------+ -- Julie Bixby [log in to unmask] http://www.bixby.org/julie/ Engage Romulan .sig cloaking device...